What?! Noooo! No 'To be continued', can I have one more chapter please??? Q.Q
*sighs* alright fine, i'll be patient. I just really like this. To sum it up, aside from a few grammar mistakes, You did an amazing job. ^_^ I hope to see more soon!
Thank you for playing!! I'm making the second chapter right now, and there will be more branching paths! Also, thank you for pointing out the grammar mistakes! I've been fixing them as well!
This was really great! I love how you describe things and your prose is great! I only found a few typos and some mistakes with the grammar, but other than that, it was great!
Oh, it's nothing major! I doubt many people would mind (it's just that my grammar buff brain caught it, lol). I didn't get screenshots for everything, but I do have two!
"Yet things has gone sideways when the prince you were to supposed to protect are cursed" should be "yet things go sideways when the prince you were supposed to protect is cursed"
I also have this:
"If you were to die, you'd like it if your funeral are filled with" should instead be "If you were to die, you'd like it if your funeral is filled with". Also, you switched the tenses in the sentence " You stood in the doorway." From what you previously wrote, I got the impression that it should have been present tense instead of past, so it would be "You stand in the doorway."
The grammatical errors I found tend to come up when you use "are" for sentences and transitions that should have "is" instead. There were also times when the tense would ping pong between the present tense and the past tense.
But don't let what I've said drag you down. Your writing is vivid and very immersive! This wip has great potential and I'm excited to see where it goes next! A few grammatical mistakes isn't the end of the world and, seeing as this is a beta demo, are to be expected! Have a great day/evening/night!
Omg thank you so much! I learnt a lot from this and I have to admit grammar and past/present tense was never my strong forte, but I think I get what I should look out for in future chapters! Thank you!! Will be sure to fix them up for the launch!
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What?! Noooo! No 'To be continued', can I have one more chapter please??? Q.Q
*sighs* alright fine, i'll be patient. I just really like this. To sum it up, aside from a few grammar mistakes, You did an amazing job. ^_^ I hope to see more soon!
Thank you for playing!! I'm making the second chapter right now, and there will be more branching paths! Also, thank you for pointing out the grammar mistakes! I've been fixing them as well!
This was really great! I love how you describe things and your prose is great! I only found a few typos and some mistakes with the grammar, but other than that, it was great!
Thank you!! Do you remember the typos / mistakes I did? Thanks for telling me btw! I should be more careful for the next chapters
Oh, it's nothing major! I doubt many people would mind (it's just that my grammar buff brain caught it, lol). I didn't get screenshots for everything, but I do have two!
"Yet things has gone sideways when the prince you were to supposed to protect are cursed" should be "yet things go sideways when the prince you were supposed to protect is cursed"
I also have this:
The grammatical errors I found tend to come up when you use "are" for sentences and transitions that should have "is" instead. There were also times when the tense would ping pong between the present tense and the past tense.
But don't let what I've said drag you down. Your writing is vivid and very immersive! This wip has great potential and I'm excited to see where it goes next! A few grammatical mistakes isn't the end of the world and, seeing as this is a beta demo, are to be expected! Have a great day/evening/night!
Omg thank you so much! I learnt a lot from this and I have to admit grammar and past/present tense was never my strong forte, but I think I get what I should look out for in future chapters! Thank you!! Will be sure to fix them up for the launch!
No problemo! :D
It was so good!! I love how you describe the pain, I almost can feel it myself. I'm looking forward for the updates!!
Thank you!! The next updates will have more branches so I'm pretty excited to make them!